Saturday, June 27, 2009

Sacrifice


I noticed her in a wedding reception
beautiful she looked but filled with tension.
Yet a helping hand she offered to many
I felt, if only her, my brother could marry.

Approaching her with this proposal
saddened I felt by her refusal
Her better half she had already found
and to him only her life was bound.

A feel of gloominess engulfed me
I turned to leave but for an ailing lady
Smiling sadly she bade me to sit beside her
Saying “That girl is the sole bread winner.”

“An ailing mother and a wastrel father
education to take care for her sister and brother
So whenever the topic of marriage arise
she makes an escape with these lies.”

“Do you know her or her family?” I inquired
Seeing tears trickling, my question I regretted.
“It is not just knowing her,” came the reply
“I happen to be her mother,” so saying she bid goodbye.

22 comments:

KParthasarathi said...

Wow, what a touching poem.I never knew that a twist could be brought even in short poems.Great job,Lakshmi!.It is beautifully written

Shravan | ശ്രവണ്‍ said...

akka; that did touch.. and the twist, as KP sir said, is awesome.. well done and too good :) loved it akkaa

A New Beginning said...

Beautifully placed in words!Hats off to you:)

CHAITRA said...

Hear touching poem with beautifully portrayed wordings!!
Loved it!!
Drop in sometime
Chaitra

Aysha said...

Very touching one Lakshmi..beautifully writtem..short and touching indeed...great job!!!

Rush said...

woow..a story so beautifully depicted between poetic lines..loved it

Herrad said...

Hi Lakshmi,

Wonderfully written.
Love,
Herrad

anupama said...

dear lakshmi,
really touching!the twist was unexpected and it pierecd my heart!beautiful poem.
keep writing.
sasneham,
anu

readersdais said...

touching one

lakshmi said...

thanks friends for the appreciative comments

Amal Bose said...

that was just awesome.. really touching.

keep blogging :)

Greener Bangalore said...

Thats very well written and the U turn at the end is awesome!

Vishwanath Seshadri said...

So, you plan to go back to her with a fresh proposal with renewed efforts ??

Nice one, Ma. Keep it flowing....

Vish

shri ramesh sadasivam said...

Wow, What a great Poem. You know the knack of transforming scenes into poems...
Congratulations...:)

And, what happened next?

ALL will Go Well. :)

Vidya said...

Very nice poem. A good story in a small poem. I liked the twist in the end. Lovely

Mitr - Friend said...

A beautiful expression...
I know a few women like this... I feel so sorry for them...
Nice to see a poem that beautifully expresses the emotion so different and deep...

Do drop into my blogs too when time permits...

Sureshkumar Punjhayil said...

Nice one... Best wishes...!!!

Femin Susan said...

Wow, you have a great poetic heart! Keep up the great posts….. Good job!
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Sujay said...

lykd it...sounds/ feels, as if it happ.

lakshmi said...

thanks a lot dear friends

deeps said...

ummmm when is next one?

workhard said...

That is a beautiful poem!!!!

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