Sacrifice
I noticed her in a wedding reception
beautiful she looked but filled with tension.
Yet a helping hand she offered to many
I felt, if only her, my brother could marry.
Approaching her with this proposal
saddened I felt by her refusal
Her better half she had already found
and to him only her life was bound.
A feel of gloominess engulfed me
I turned to leave but for an ailing lady
Smiling sadly she bade me to sit beside her
Saying “That girl is the sole bread winner.”
“An ailing mother and a wastrel father
education to take care for her sister and brother
So whenever the topic of marriage arise
she makes an escape with these lies.”
“Do you know her or her family?” I inquired
Seeing tears trickling, my question I regretted.
“It is not just knowing her,” came the reply
“I happen to be her mother,” so saying she bid goodbye.
22 comments:
Wow, what a touching poem.I never knew that a twist could be brought even in short poems.Great job,Lakshmi!.It is beautifully written
akka; that did touch.. and the twist, as KP sir said, is awesome.. well done and too good :) loved it akkaa
Beautifully placed in words!Hats off to you:)
Hear touching poem with beautifully portrayed wordings!!
Loved it!!
Drop in sometime
Chaitra
Very touching one Lakshmi..beautifully writtem..short and touching indeed...great job!!!
woow..a story so beautifully depicted between poetic lines..loved it
Hi Lakshmi,
Wonderfully written.
Love,
Herrad
dear lakshmi,
really touching!the twist was unexpected and it pierecd my heart!beautiful poem.
keep writing.
sasneham,
anu
touching one
thanks friends for the appreciative comments
that was just awesome.. really touching.
keep blogging :)
Thats very well written and the U turn at the end is awesome!
So, you plan to go back to her with a fresh proposal with renewed efforts ??
Nice one, Ma. Keep it flowing....
Vish
Wow, What a great Poem. You know the knack of transforming scenes into poems...
Congratulations...:)
And, what happened next?
ALL will Go Well. :)
Very nice poem. A good story in a small poem. I liked the twist in the end. Lovely
A beautiful expression...
I know a few women like this... I feel so sorry for them...
Nice to see a poem that beautifully expresses the emotion so different and deep...
Do drop into my blogs too when time permits...
Nice one... Best wishes...!!!
Wow, you have a great poetic heart! Keep up the great posts….. Good job!
welcome to my poem blog http://www.poems-of-nature.blogspot.com/
lykd it...sounds/ feels, as if it happ.
thanks a lot dear friends
ummmm when is next one?
That is a beautiful poem!!!!
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